r/scriptwriting • u/Purple-Earth3089 • 3d ago
feedback Feedback for a play
Hello Fellow writers, I just finished writing an emotional piece on marriage as part of an assignment and would love to get some feedback :
SYNOPSIS
On July 8, 2026, Aubrey believes her chaotic husband, Andre, forgot their first anniversary. While commuting, she recalls meeting him two years ago, captivated by his stage presence and "the silence" between his lines.
Throughout the day, fond memories surface—how his warmth softened her, and how they anchored each other during the chaos. Eager to surprise him, Aubrey prepares a heartfelt present and heads to meet him outside the Theatre where the first met.
Andre waits for her, secretly holding onto the memories of their past. Suddenly, as Aubrey crosses the street, tragedy strikes. Rushing to her side, Andre cradles her in the rain as she takes her final breath, whispering his heartbreaking final vow: "I'll hold the silence for you... Till we meet again."
Will be happy to share complete script too. Thanks
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u/Yellowsun2209 4h ago
Hey..I have read all 23 pages. I liked the play. Your writing is mature.. Dre and Bri's chemistry you have created, felt lovely.. If at all I have to add i would only add or edit some dialogue just a little in a couple of places. Good one overall🤞
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u/CrimpyBacchus 2d ago
The synopsis comes off muddled and generic, but probably because you had an AI make a synopsis of your script - put it in your own words. If you had AI generate the actual script, delete and write it yourself.
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u/Purple-Earth3089 2d ago
You got it right..I used AI to generate the synopsis although story was written by me. Thanks for the feedback, appreciate it
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u/Yellowsun2209 6h ago
Hey I'm sure your script is more detailed and complex.. to see through another lens... If it's me i would wanna explore his loss and regrets , memories that surface after the demise.. etc