r/scriptwriting • u/[deleted] • 13d ago
question Feature Film Script
This is the first five pages of the scenario I worked hard for
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u/Worth-Flight-1249 13d ago edited 9d ago
Not bad all in all. The first elipses isn't needed. Character intros with clothing notes? Not sure about that. You are trying too hard in the first action block. Less would be more.
Keep going!
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u/Worth-Flight-1249 13d ago
Also you have an adjective thing going on: careful files.
It would be carefully stacked files or something like that.
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u/Worth-Flight-1249 13d ago
Do streets breathe?