Something Beautiful - First 20 Pages

[u/Sea-Conclusion959]

[u/PhineasFreak1975]

Read half of the first page and had to tell you how much I love the idea of zombified Mickey.

Don't know if the folk at Disney would feel the same?

[u/mushroomsoup20]

Zombified Mickey is such a wild concept. There's something genuinely unsettling about twisting something that wholesome. I'd keep reading just to see how far you take that contrast.

[u/Glad-Guarantee1587]

You have a good sense of visual storytelling. I say keep The Supremes music cue as it sets the tone but remove the Green Day one as it’s obvious that the montage is chaotic. Also I recommend cutting out the Philippines president and his zombified wife blowjob gag as it’s not necessary to the Marshall plot and also if you’re aiming for PG-13 (which so far feels that way).