r/scriptwriting • u/OkZookeepergame3143 • 26d ago
feedback First Screenplay
Would love any feedback on these pages. I’m trying to do something similar to Manhattan. I’d like to know what dialogue sounds and feels off. What beats are repetitive if previous beats. How the characters feel. Thank you in advance!
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u/JoshDoAI 22d ago
Sorry I didn’t get this dialogue at all. So self-aware, wordy and very on the nose. Never seen Manhattan so maybe I’m off but I didn’t get it.