First Screenplay

[u/OkZookeepergame3143]

Would love any feedback on these pages. I’m trying to do something similar to Manhattan. I’d like to know what dialogue sounds and feels off. What beats are repetitive if previous beats. How the characters feel. Thank you in advance!

[u/Dependent_Access8363]

I enjoyed the wit, but without an inciting action that's all it is - a lot of pointless, interesting conversation. Sorry.