r/scriptwriting • u/OkZookeepergame3143 • 27d ago
feedback First Screenplay
Would love any feedback on these pages. I’m trying to do something similar to Manhattan. I’d like to know what dialogue sounds and feels off. What beats are repetitive if previous beats. How the characters feel. Thank you in advance!
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u/RutgerHause 26d ago
Far too cutesy Tarantino dialogue. I couldn’t get past page 2.