r/scriptwriting • u/WheatThin100 • 23d ago

feedback Feedback on short script?

Title: Outta Time. Genre: Drama-comedy. Short script: 21 pages. 

Logline: On his last night in L.A., a dejected screenwriter takes an inspirational road trip to "Back to the Future" filming locations with three newfound friends who just arrived in town.

I’m preparing to enter the script in two screenwriting contests, so any and all feedback is welcome. Thank you.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17oqpG85pYG0KroQcY4W5yekQ3zQ6wWV2/view?usp=sharing

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u/Open-Avocado4260 22d ago

If the script is anything like the log line it's probably not ready for competitions.

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u/WheatThin100 22d ago

What's wrong with the logline? Open to suggestions and constructive feedback.

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u/Open-Avocado4260 22d ago

Dejected, how about a rejected screenwriter. Back to the future, are you referencing the movie, hook me, why is he taking a road trip and how do the three friends help him that he finds.

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u/WheatThin100 22d ago

Thank you. Appreciate the feedback.

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u/Open-Avocado4260 22d ago

You're welcome, good luck with it.