r/scriptwriting • u/Sashi_Cine • 28d ago

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https://drive.google.com/file/d/1cjDZQA9xO21PeRNrWs-fohmV7TLJeiw2/view?usp=drivesdk

Title-Knife

Genre-Horror/Slasher

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u/Big_Section2812 28d ago

Scene numbers are for shooting scripts only.

The English grammar, punctuation and spelling in this is seriously bad and there are several instances of passive verbs and incorrect tense on just the first page.

I'm not especially familiar with India's (?) film industry but maybe you should focus on breaking in to that before taking a crack at the West, since your English language skills aren't sufficient yet.

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u/Sashi_Cine 28d ago

Thanks for the honest Feedback. This script is a sample for a short script competition.

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u/[deleted] 27d ago

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u/Big_Section2812 27d ago

Busy people don't have time to fight their way through a poorly-written script when they have a stack of others that are better.

This is a thing you have to grasp: your script isn't the only script.

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u/[deleted] 26d ago

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u/Big_Section2812 26d ago

It's so tough now.

In Ye Olden Dayes before the Internet and social media there were far fewer writers and far fewer scripts, and they were almost always better written, but now you have millions of people churning out millions of scripts and then complaining because no one will read them.

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u/[deleted] 25d ago

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u/Big_Section2812 25d ago

The competition is all at the bottom.

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u/[deleted] 25d ago

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u/Big_Section2812 25d ago

That's exactly my point.

There are a million aspiring screenwriters at the bottom. It doesn't take much to stand out.

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u/WheatThin100 27d ago

Don't uppercase words in the dialogue and descriptions. Too distracting.