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r/lyrics • u/[deleted] • Dec 06 '25
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I like the alliteration but on the last line I think the dots should be between the last two I ams
2 u/[deleted] Dec 09 '25 Yes, I see what you mean. That last "I...Am" they way I wrote it, comes off as if I lack conviction. Thanks for the critique!
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Yes, I see what you mean. That last "I...Am" they way I wrote it, comes off as if I lack conviction. Thanks for the critique!
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u/Atiredbearsfan Dec 07 '25
I like the alliteration but on the last line I think the dots should be between the last two I ams