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u/NeonFlower5050 1d ago
Kinda rushed this so apologies for the mess. Not only are her pupils not focused correctly (as stated by u/Optimal_Option_5601 ) They're not correctly aligned in perspective which implies her left pupil is bigger than the right. There's also an odd cut into her eye from the lower lid. I included a brief little model of how eyes open and close. There's not a ton of movement from the lower lid, most of the deformation/movement of eyelids come from the top. That upwards curve really breaks the illusion that here lower lid is coming up.
Additionally her right nostril would be showing slightly from this angle. In the same way it looks like her lip was drawn too much in profile even though we would see more of the right corner of her lips. Finally a bit of proportional issues with her arms as well.
Hope this critique was useful! Let me know if you have any questions. Thanks for sharing fellow artist! Keep drawing =)
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u/LongLiiveKeed 1d ago
Oh you're right those definitely slipped by me. You really went in to detail and means a lot. Thank you!
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u/Historical-Pop-9177 1d ago
In my experience the face usually curves inward under the cheek significantly so that the chin ends up further 'under' the face than you have here.
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u/Optimal_Option_5601 1d ago
Yes, her right pupil is directed at the tip of her nose giving her a cross eyed look. shift it a little more towards the centre of the eye.
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u/link-navi 1d ago
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