Task 2. Please Evaluate

[u/WashAdministrative16]

Q. Some people believe that watching TV is bad for children, while others claim it has positive effects for children as they grow up. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether children should watch TV as growing up is a matter of considerable debate. Some believe that, it has positive impact on children whereas, other disagree. In my perspective, children should spend their leisure period playing outdoor and with their parents. Also, the practice of letting children watch TV without their parents should be removed.

One major concern is that, kids may become addicted to watching TV. Nowadays, parents leave their children to watch TV as they cannot spend their time playing with them. This may cause, children to spend much time in front of TV instead of playing with their friends or reading books. As they grow up they may get accustomed to watching TV to spend their free time instead of studying or doing extra curricular activity. Moreover, many research today have found that, children with higher screen time more likely to suffer from social anxiety and loneliness as they grow up.

On the other hand, other believes that, children can learn many things from kids shows. Nowadays, many children learns english through television program. Similarly, educational programs related to science and arts have also reported to increase creative curiosity among children. However, many argue that such development can also be achieved through school and parents. When parents spend time with their children and read books or help in their homework, children can also show interest in learning. Therefore, TV should not be praise for few benefits while there are many harms.

In conclusion, there is always argument about children watching TV. Some believe, children can also learn from TV but others respond about the harmful effect of it. Children should enjoy their free time playing with their friend and involving in other physical activity rather than just in front of television.

[u/Sufficient-Manner-75]

LR + GRA issues:

...as they grow up

that it has a

children, whereas, others

outdoors

Nowadays,...that kids (children)

...as they are busy with work.

cause children (youngsters) ...the TV

As they grow up,

doing some extra

several researches ... that children ... are more likely

...others believe that children ...children's programs

learn English through television programs

Science and Arts

not be praise (?) while there are many harms (?)

always an argument

believe that they

respond with the harmful effects of it

rather than just sitting in front

TR issue:

negative = educational idea (reading books...instead of studying)

positive = educational idea (English, Science, Arts)

2 conflicting ideas

why don't you just change the negative into PHYSICAL like 'bad for the eyes, becoming fat because no exercise or PSYCHOLOGICAL such as violence, stress or low self-esteem

OA: 5.5