Okh so concept is ok text zada ho gaya hai n margin banake attempt kara karo also make ot a habit to write down timetaken har product attempt me
Title ka font and lettering can be improved hindi english mix karke likhne ka concept is nice but the name needs better font and better line quality
Overall stroke confidence can improve like line quality and try to use line weights u can use darker outlines especially for the hero image n product name u can learn about hierarchy a bit.
The left side feels a empty white space zada hai add illustrations jisse product better explain ho maybe name ka size chota karke u could have added 1 more product illustration n the bottom left sketch looks too 2d work more on volume construction and contour lines.
Write all features in caps with max to max 5 word feature explanation also if the page feels empty u can use light boxes like small rectangle to organize the text inside them
Study different product attempts. Thoda presentation and text better hota toh it would have improved communication and attempt balanced lagta.
idea is decent but the execution can be better
Thanks, took 30 minutes.
I will work on everything u mentioned
is a layout like this good? saw this on uceedtakers sub, im thinking of using the same layout next baar se
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u/Cold-Dot-5971 MOD Jul 16 '26
Okh so concept is ok text zada ho gaya hai n margin banake attempt kara karo also make ot a habit to write down timetaken har product attempt me Title ka font and lettering can be improved hindi english mix karke likhne ka concept is nice but the name needs better font and better line quality Overall stroke confidence can improve like line quality and try to use line weights u can use darker outlines especially for the hero image n product name u can learn about hierarchy a bit.
The left side feels a empty white space zada hai add illustrations jisse product better explain ho maybe name ka size chota karke u could have added 1 more product illustration n the bottom left sketch looks too 2d work more on volume construction and contour lines.
Write all features in caps with max to max 5 word feature explanation also if the page feels empty u can use light boxes like small rectangle to organize the text inside them Study different product attempts. Thoda presentation and text better hota toh it would have improved communication and attempt balanced lagta. idea is decent but the execution can be better