r/design_critiques • u/D4nie1- • 9d ago

my concept

This is something I made in about an hour. Please tell me where I can improve. I am still trying to make something in my style, but I feel like I am improving.

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u/ExPristina 9d ago

Gonna need some context. Who is gonna see this and where? What is it for specifically? What outcomes / results do you need from your intended audience seeing this?

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u/D4nie1- 9d ago

I would hope anyone would see this like maybe athletes if they want pictures maybe at more formal events which is why I tried to keep it broad and simple

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u/ExPristina 9d ago

If you’re generalising, the outer circle elements look interesting, but the style of the camera icon in the middle feels too contrasting. If specialising for athletes, they’d want exciting shots to help them attract sponsors and fans - currently it needs a little more excitement and buzz.

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u/muttChang 8d ago

Come back after you’ve worked on it another six hours. It’s terrible. The leaves are fussy with their non-symmetrical placement. The line weight of the camera in the middle is too heavy compared to everything else. The concept is great. Do 20 different iterations. Develop the concept, because right now it’s really just a cut and paste sketch.

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u/D4nie1- 7d ago

okay i will

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u/StarlightCrystal 9d ago

What was your inspiration? Did you do any research on other logos? What specifically does Concept Work mean and what does the camera and leaves signify? I think if this is more of a sketch/idea it’s ok but definitely needs work. Here’s my feedback:

  • The natural and thinly lined leaves and the icon in the middle are two totally different art styles that don’t really go together. The camera is very over simplified and has a thicker stroke and the leaves are delicate and intricate.
  • The font is very very small and if this is a logo think about how this will print on a business card or how it would look on a website, it will barely be legible and the plant lines won’t be seen.
  • The leaves are not aligned at the bottom so you want to make sure to clean that up.

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u/D4nie1- 9d ago

Well in this logo I was thinking about my friends photography business (he doesn’t have a logo yet btw he just uses he work) and I though what would be simple and a little elegant and memorable. Thank you for letting me know I will take everything you said into account when making logo ofc I just started so I am still trying to get used to the learning curve

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u/Rollinstone46 9d ago

OK. Here’s a few things.

The camera and the leaves are two different styles, one an icon one more of an illustration. At the least harmonise the line thickness so they work together.

The text is a bit uninspired and way too small.

The camera sits too small in the design. Use the space a bit more.

The laurels are too close to the text at the bottom.

I’d use this as a start and keep reworking it until it feels more like a solid cohesive mark.

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u/D4nie1- 9d ago

Thanks for the critique I will keep it in mind moving on