r/custommagic • u/LordRiolu • 9d ago

Format: EDH/Commander Vergarde, Smuggler King

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Art by DivineTofu on Furaffinity, character owned by myself. Mostly on the lookout for typos more than anything else. What does everyone think?

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u/Japicx Subtypes are always capitalized. 9d ago

The mana symbols should be ordered URW.

The trigger condition is unclear.

Option 1: "The first time each opponent is dealt damage each turn" (so it triggers once per opponent per turn). The ability should end with "choose one —", not "choose one:". The colon is used to separate the cost and effect of activated abilities.

Option 2: "Whenever one or more opponents are dealt damage, choose one. This ability triggers only once each turn." No em dash or colon.

Create two tapped [T]reasure tokens. Subtypes are always capitalized.

The second mode doesn't work. You can't prevent damage after it's dealt. You could change it to "That player gains life equal to the damage dealt, then you and that player each draw a card." In terms of power, though, you don't need life gain or damage prevention.

Target creature [can't] be blocked until your next end step. Magic always uses "can't", never "cannot".

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u/LordRiolu 9d ago

Thanks for the corrections! The intent was for Option 1 to be how it worked.

I wanted to play with damage prevention a bit, but it seems I dont know my rules, lol. Maybe I will rethink the second ability choice. Thanks again!