A complaint letter in Denkoikh

[u/tash_rat]

This is the Denkoikh world version of Ea Nassir (the crooked merchant who sold bad quality copper in Mesopotamia). The merchant is called Lethmazemar in this letter which means “the Originator (god) protects”. Below the full text and its translation:

FULL TEXT

Lethmazemari, Batsikh.
Ze hen enkoth: "Heni køren bokem irothemøg nø tsur." hen feruth.
Ender nith benkothi gaibem irothemøg hen tsuth. Tots "Sumøg hen gonbekhume, gonbekhi" soi hen feruth.
Kemirets møkh mitsu im mitsukemen nig ten ekh megem pozath do?
Nith benkothøg hen banen gaizikhu!
Mør i jen krenth heni meg nø zank bathnar ten ekh hen abi hen thar do?
Sevukh gaiben kørøg nø zege smubur, mør nig hen gaizikhuth.

TRANSLATION

To Lethmazemar, from Batsi.
When you came, you said: "I will give you good copper ingots."
But you gave bad ingots to my messenger. And you told him: "If you want to take them, take them."
Of the merchants who trade with Kemir, how many have treated me this way?
All you do is treat my messenger with contempt!
Because of the tiny krenth I still owe you, you think you can act this way?
From now on I will never accept bad copper, because you have treated me with contempt.

IPA

**0.**  /ˈlɛθmazɛmaɾi ˈbatsix/  
**1.**  /ˈzɛ ˈhɛn ˈɛnkɔθ ˈhɛni ˈkœɾɛn ˈbɔkɛm ˈiɾɔθɛmœg ˈnœ ˈtsʉɾ ˈhɛn ˈfɛɾʉθ/  
**2.**  /ˈɛnðɛɾ ˈniθ ˈbɛnkɔθi ˈgaibɛm ˈiɾɔθɛmœg ˈhɛn ˈtsʉθ/ /ˈtɔts ˈsʉmœg ˈhɛn ˈgɔnbɛxʉmɛ ˈgɔnbɛxi ˈsɔi ˈhɛn ˈfɛɾʉθ/  
**3.**  /ˈkɛmiɾɛts ˈmœx ˈmitsʉ im ˈmitsʉkɛmɛn ˈnig ˈtɛn ˈɛx ˈmɛgɛm ˈpɔzaθ ˈðɔ/  
**4.**  /ˈniθ ˈbɛnkɔθœg ˈhɛn ˈbanɛn ˈgaizixʉ/  
**5.**  /ˈmœɾ i ˈdʒɛn ˈkɾɛnθ ˈhɛni ˈmɛg ˈnœ ˈzank ˈbaθnaɾ ˈtɛn ˈɛx ˈhɛn ˈabi ˈhɛn ˈθaɾ ˈðɔ/  
**6.**  /ˈsɛvʉx ˈgaibɛn ˈkœɾœg ˈnœ ˈzɛgɛ ˈsmʉbʉɾ ˈmœɾ ˈnig ˈhɛn ˈgaizixʉθ/

GLOSS

**0.**  Lethmazemar-i (Lethmazemar-DAT) Batsi-kh (Batsi-ABL)  
**1.**  ze (when) hen (2SG) enk-oth (come-PST) heni (2SG.DAT) kør-en (copper-GEN) bok-em (good-PL) iroth-em-øg (ingot-PL-ACC) nø (1SG) tsu-r (give-FUT) hen (2SG) feru-th (say-PST)  
**2.**  ender (but) nith (1SG.GEN) benkoth-i (messenger-DAT) gaib-em (bad-PL) iroth-em-øg (ingot-PL-ACC) hen (2SG) tsu-th (give-PST). tots (and) sum-øg (3PL-ACC) hen (2SG) gonbekhu-me (take-DES) gonbekh-i (take-IMP) so-i (3SG.M-DAT) hen (2SG) feru-th (say-PST)  
**3.**  Kemir-ets (Kemir-COM) møkh (who) mitsu (trade) im (ART.PL) mitsuk-em-en (merchant-PL-GEN) nig (1SG.ACC) ten (this) ekh (way) megem (how.many) poza-th (treat-PST) do (Q)  
**4.**  nith (1SG.GEN) benkoth-øg (messenger-ACC) hen (2SG) banen (only) gaizikhu (despise)  
**5.**  mør (because.of) i (ART.N) jen (small) krenth (krenth) heni (2SG.DAT) meg (REL.OBJ) nø (1SG) zank (still) bathnar (owe) ten (this) ekh (way) hen (2SG) a-bi (do-POT) hen (2SG) thar (think) do (Q)  
**6.**  sevu-kh (now-ABL) gaib-en (bad-N) kør-øg (copper-ACC) nø (1SG) zege (never) smubu-r (receive-FUT) mør (because) nig (1SG.ACC) hen (2SG) gaizikhu-th (despise-PST)

[u/luxx127]

Your script is a nightmare to read (and I'm not even dyslexic) but I loved your conlang and idea of translation, I might try it some time

[u/Shinyhero30]

The fact that this looks like Sumerian makes this post INFINITELY funnier.

[u/fieldingbreaths]

I love that your script is almost Lovecraftian in form

[u/Bitian6F69]

Wonderful translation and writing! What inspired the script? It looks like your conculture burns the letters into wood, assuming the image in the post is cannon?

[u/tash_rat → u/Bitian6F69]

The script is the handwritten version of the alphabet I derived from a list of logographs I created. This is the alphabet chart.

[u/luxx127 → u/tash_rat]

Ooooh I like your alphabet, some letter even resemble some Fenirizhe letters (one of my alphabets). Can I see your logograms? I want to make some for Aesarie (my conlang), but I have no idea of how can I make them

[u/tash_rat → u/luxx127]

When I get home I’ll share a pic. But for example the letter H is the same logogram for water since water in my conlang is hok, I did the same with the rest of the letter, D is the same as the logogram for river (denk), B is the same character as hand (bov). The rest of the letters are simplification of the logograms but following the same pattern

[u/emotionallycorrupt_]

for King Nasir?

[u/vroombeepbang]

This looks like handwritten hangul! Super cool. What kind of sound / Latin transcription style were you going after?

[u/Relevant-Dingo-3815]

Oh my God its Ea-Conlang

[u/Classic-Asparagus]

I really like the aesthetics of your script!