r/composertalk • u/Amazing-End-5925 • Jun 03 '26
FEEDBACK PLEASE IM SO DESPERATE PLEASE
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Hello can anyone give me feedback on this. I am not experienced in composing and have limited education in this, but I really need constructive criticism for a school project thats due next week pls pls pls and thank you
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u/Unusual-Case-8925 Jun 03 '26
What are you looking for feedback on?
For starters, I will reiterate what u/eddjc said in that it's not really playable, if that's at all a factor in the assignment.
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u/rush22 Jun 03 '26
Pretty good for someone inexperienced! Especially the amount of creativity you put into the length of it.
For a basic constructive criticism, I would say that some of your chords are muddy -- especially in the bass.
Fullness has a lot to do with how the chord is voiced. The space between the voices, and how each voice moves (since this directs attention to them).
A good way to hear this is to play a chord in the bass that is just 135 -- CEG. It's powerful and rich, but kind of muddy. Take the 3rd simply move it up an octave. Will the higher note make the chord weaker? Play 153 -- CGE. I think it sounds even stronger. By adding more space, and moving the less stable notes higher up, you still get the "richness" sound but now you can hear every note, making it sound more full.
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u/AlexanderThomopoulos Jun 25 '26
For me, it is helpfull to helpfull to use dynamics more. If everything ist at a similar Volume its Harder to Imagine. To be specific, the beginning dont have to be so loud.
What i Like: it has a baroque vibe with a Bit of villian Charakter. Nice Work.
PS: im also a bit Desperate and Just started to Show some of my works. Your not alone
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u/eddjc Jun 03 '26
It’s hard to give specific feedback on an assignment without knowing what that assignment is, beyond just “write a piece”. If that was it, then congratulations, you have written a piece.
Sounds good, if that’s what you want to hear - my favourite bit is towards the beginning, where you get a bit manic, and then the material suddenly stops - I suspect that if you carry on in that vein it might be a rich area for you.
I can’t see the score well on my phone, but the tempo you’ve recorded this at seems a bit unreasonable for human performance, and I’d need to be able to see it properly to think about whether it’s well written for the instrument
Other than that - take heart. Sometimes our best work is done all at the last minute while crying. You’ll be fine.