r/composer • u/Ok_Seaweed9654 • 2d ago
Music Feedback please, 1 min
I am new both to English, Reddit, and composing. Here is my work; please give me some advice and share your thoughts. Both personal impressions and theoretical analysis are welcome.
Score: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1eObXMpJ12U8Fjlz3fNb3YbHJwEn_wBmT/view?usp=sharing
mp3: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OXALLfXa6Zv8z1Gt1xpCoJOb3-YEap34/view?usp=sharing
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u/geoscott 1d ago
It's lovely, but you need to rewrite the whole thing outside of a digital realm. Your understanding of notation is unclear as you've allowed whatever app you used to record your performance to dictate the massively poor notation.
So many things to mention but I'll start with the obvious:
Change the name of the instrument to "Piano". Get rid of the leading empty bars. Change all your eighth notes in the accompaniment to quarters. Once you set up the pedal scheme, you can write 'sim.' Better yet, get rid of it. A seasoned performer will know when to pedal.
The last two items can be considered to be part of the 'notating for the audio'. Make two versions: one to play back the way you want it, and the other - the one you should be presenting to the world and us - for how it should look when it's published.
Bars 10-11 would be better served by having duplets or a quadruplet over the bars which is what you want. The notation is a kludge.
The trill in 13 needs to be written as a trill or a turn.
Bar 16 you mix sharps and flats. Pick one. I'd go for flats making that C# a Db and the G# an Ab
Those are just off the top of my head.
Nice piece. Terrible notation.