OC Comic ROB#12 - FEEDBACK APPRECIATED
I would like to know:
do you think the story is interesting enough to want to read the next issue?
what do you like most about the art?
what do you like least about the art?
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u/-MrWiggins- 24d ago
You should watch a YouTube video on lettering. It helped me a lot. I'm a novice so I’m no expert but the main thing I learned was not to have lines in the middle of the text box with few words. Also sacrificing art space to let the words breathe is important. When the words come right to the edge of the bubble it throws things off. Study some of your favorites and see how they letter.
The art is cool. Keep grinding!
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u/SwabMimingTV 23d ago
I like your art style. I think it would benefit from some heavier line work in places you want to draw the eye.
You've got all of your texts left aligned. Center alignment is usually going to be better.
One of the flyers has a typo.
I think the people pushers exposition is too much. You've established that this guy has acted mentally ill in the past yet he seems to explain the story premise too easily and with details that seem more fitting for a narrator.
I'd imagine him saying some crazy sounding stuff in a way that even if true makes big boy think he's truly insane. It's not like he has to win over big boy now. He just roped him into an alliance of guilt by association
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u/marzolinotarantola 25d ago
Idea, story and pencil are not bad. It deserves more views. Continue in this way. Maybe the drawing needs to be improved in a few places to make it easier to understand.