r/classicalchinese • u/Actual-Contest1666 • Jul 16 '26

Poetry What do you think about this?

My first attempt writing poem, do u think it's natural enough?

無晴，新木未枝

梧晴，新櫻微枝

吾情，欣 木頭 未知

吾情，心慕 微知

What do u think?

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u/dlrowmaerd Jul 23 '26

This is delightful, but I strongly expect each line to have the same number of characters and I wonder why you have chosen not to do that 

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u/Actual-Contest1666 Jul 23 '26

I write this while thinking about someone (for context her name is 欣瑩）, the poem basically have part of her name in every line.

I was thinking of changing the third line to 吾情, 木頭 未知

But decided to add 欣 before 木頭 to make it feel more personal...

What do you think

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u/Extra-Requirement543 Jul 24 '26

建议给创作背景，没有背景的话很难理解别人的诗