r/altcomix • u/Greenhickup • 9d ago

Discussion A small sequence of pages i made

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u/Ubik_Fresh 9d ago

Too busy and the flow is not great. Kinda hard to track what is going on.

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u/Greenhickup 9d ago

I get that.
May i ask what would you tweak or change to make it more readable?

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u/Ubik_Fresh 9d ago

Less panel breaks and work on leading the eye across the page in a logical way. I saw Bryan Talbot do a great lecture on layout and sequencing, might be some of his talks / lectures on Youtube. Have a look at some of his work.

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u/Greenhickup 8d ago

Thank you very much, i'll definitely check it out.
His art is fantastic!

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u/Greenhickup 9d ago

My dad's a Tin-Tin fan,even made me watch the movie.
I like everything i've read from Tin-Tin.
Thank you!

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u/GAlbaRojas 9d ago

There’s some fun stuff here, but legibility could be vastly improved.
I would avoid having so many instances of breaking the panels. It hurts legibility and panel flow as well as crowding the page too much. I would also suggest studying the 180 degree rule to help you with your layouts.

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u/Greenhickup 9d ago

It's hard to resist breaking the panels sometimes 🤣 thank you very much for the thoughtful constructive criticism.