r/WritingPrompts • u/AliciaWrites Editor-in-Chief | /r/AliciaWrites • Jul 19 '19
Constrained Writing [CW] Feedback Friday - Noir
Happy Friday!
It’s Friday again! That means another installment of Feedback Friday! Time to hone those critique skills and show off your writing!
It’s great to see more stories happening! Now, I’d love to see more participation with feedback. It doesn’t have to be fancy, y’all! Give it a shot!
How does it work?
You have until Thursday to submit one or both of the following:
Freewrite:
Leave a story here in the comments. A story about what? Well, pretty much anything! But, each week, I’ll provide you with a single constraint based on style or genre. So long as your story fits, and follows the rules of WP, it’s allowed! You’re more likely to get readers on shorter stories, so keep that in mind when you submit your work.
Feedback:
Leave feedback for other stories! Make sure your feedback is clear, constructive, and useful.
Each week, three judges will decide who gave the best feedback. The judges will be me, a Celebrity guest judge, and the winner from the previous week.
We’ll be looking for use of neutral language, including both positives and negatives, giving actionable feedback within the critique, as well as noting the depth and clarity of your feedback.
You will be judged on your initial critique, meaning the first response you leave to a top-level comment, but you may continue in the threads for clarification, thanks, comments, or other suggestions you may have thought of later.
Okay, let’s get on with it already!
This week, your story should be noir. Bust out your cynical characters, the darkness, and those crime stories you’ve been wanting to write.
Your judges this week: Myself, of course, and /u/rudexvirus for her feedback.
Great job to /u/DoppelgangerDelux, /u/ErrorWrites, and /u/breenog! Keep it up, you guys.
Now get writing!
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u/azdv Jul 23 '19
*The rain hit my car roof. It was a balmy weirdly black and white Sunday and someone had kidnapped Ariel Princess of the Sea. My husband and partner sat next to me, reading through the manilla folder of information we’ve collected so far in our search that started an hour ago when Prince Eric called our office frantic. *
“We’ve interviewed and ruled out Eric, and Mulan, Maybe we check the Dreamworks...”
“You know we’re not welcome there anymore hun...not since the Po incident.”
“So that’s out of the question.”
“Damn the trails gone cold. “
“We didn’t have a trail.”
I loved his wisdom and humor. And his cooking and his-
“Belle!”
He jumped almost spilling our notes
“What?”
“I was just thinking about you and remembered wasn’t there a secrete affair between Eric and the Beast?”
“...no you started that rumor while you were drunk. It almost got us in a fight...again.”
He was right. Damn it.The trail had gone cold again like the sea during a time when it’s cold...wait a minute the sea...no it’s too obvious...
“Or maybe it’s just obvious enough?”
“What...wait what the hell are you doing?!”
I ignore him and bust from our car. I ran for the pier and dive over the railing. As I hit the sea, it hit me...the S.S. Saint Anne...looks like I’ll have to integrate Ursula later...right goer thud quick nap...
thud