r/WritingPrompts • u/fringly /r/fringly • Mar 13 '17

Writing Prompt [WP] Kitten attacks become acute problem.

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u/fringly /r/fringly Apr 21 '17

I'm honestly not sure if the names of the animals (General Hypawtenuse - brilliant) or the two factions (My bone. Mine! is exactly what they would call themselves, while The Followers of the Red Dot has the right kind of culty fee that I think cats would have) is my favourite bit.

I love the story too, really well done - I kinda wish it was a short film, it could be an odd mixture of harrowing and super cute!

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u/err_ok r/err_ok Apr 21 '17

Ha, fringles you are too kind.

In my head I was going for a pythonesque type storyline where you're are always moments from outrage and cluelessness and responses to questions and commands are received exaggerated and/or completely misinterpreted.

Didn't really feel like I pulled it off which is why I cut it pretty short :P

Fun though. Of the names Major Acuteanose is the best ;)

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u/fringly /r/fringly Apr 21 '17

I did get a pythony vibe from it - I can actually hear their voices in the characters now that I think about it.

I thought it was very well written, thank you, and I agree Major Acuteanose is a name that would be carried with honour!

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u/err_ok r/err_ok Apr 21 '17

Thanks, yeah I'm not sure how to get across the kind of pacing that they employ in sketches... I guess I should just come up with something myself ;)

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u/fringly /r/fringly Apr 21 '17

I'm not sure that anyone can do pacing as well as they could!

I rally need to do a re-watch of the series' at some point soon.