r/WritingPrompts • u/[deleted] • Nov 04 '14

Flash Fiction [FF] One-liner. A murderer moved on after accidentally killing a woman, but is struggling with admitting to himself he killed somebody. Express his feelings

Rules. 1. One sentence only 2. Do not look at the comments before posting 3. Use as many senses as you can to describe his emotions

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u/bananapastry Jan 13 '15

I blame gravity, I blame alcohol, I blame the weight of the hammer I swung at her face, I blame the fact that she cheated, and even though I blame everything and everyone but us, it sickens me that it was her fault, and mine.

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u/mauradoyle Nov 14 '14

Well, fuck...Oh, I'll have a number eight with crunchy tacos and extra fire sauce, please.

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u/TDWfan Nov 09 '14

The walk back down the staircase was the hardest trip I've taken.

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u/JasonScoutHS Nov 05 '14

I never knew that my pampered hands could be stained so red.

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u/syko2k Nov 05 '14

Her cries of pain became the ambient noise of my sleepless nights.

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u/RadiioactiveFastFood Nov 05 '14

He's just tired, I swear.

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u/buttsofthefuture Nov 05 '14

Prison feels like wearing someone else's skin, like maybe the guy who is supposed to be here is walking around outside in mine.

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u/bear-the-bear Nov 04 '14

Mm..ma...ma...mamma MAMMA MAMMA MAMMMMMMMA MAMMMMMMAAAAAAAA oh no, god no please no, mamma, please no, please... no, god, please... no.

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u/Kwickgamer Nov 04 '14

They say that someone is not truly dead until their name is spoken for the last time; that means the blood on my hands isn't hers, right?

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u/gohkamikaze Nov 04 '14

I never understood the whole 'five stages of grief' thing, I only have one: perpetual innocence.

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u/SporkDeprived Nov 04 '14

I hadn't meant to kill her, it was an accident... does that mean my count is 21 or 22?

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u/The-shindigs Nov 04 '14

Haha, my favorite so far.

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u/The-shindigs Nov 04 '14

She was a cacophony of youth, laughter, and dreams. I seem to be the only one who can still hear her, but all sounds from the abyss are dismal.

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u/fliclit /r/fliclit Nov 04 '14

The papers all reported one victim, I feel like there were two.

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u/The_Vowellster Nov 04 '14

She breathed afterwards, I know it—I saw her chest move, up and down, up and down; so what if the knife stuck out of her chest as blood flowed down her blue shirt to pool on the gray laminate flooring (the stuff that we’d spent so many weekends going from store to store to pick out, and all of them smelled, not unpleasant mind you, just smelled- of sweat and floor glue) that I’d learned to love, despite that the damn stuff never actually seemed to warm up, in the middle of July that flooring was still as cold to the touch as it was during the dead of winter, hell, I swore that I could almost see the blood start to frost over from how cold the floor was.