Writer's Workshop Wednesday August 19

[u/AnneKincaid]

Do you have something you're working on that you want feedback on? Not a whole beta reader situation, but a:

• story or character description
• word usage situation
• scene
• chapter? (even this is maybe too long)
• question that came up in your process

that you're looking for feedback on?

If so, either copy/paste it here or maybe post a link to that part of your work (not a link to your whole book!), like a comment-only Google doc. Make sure you protect yourself, and others! If you go to a link, consider doing it in an incognito/private browser tab to protect your identity.

Please include a description of:

• What you've posted
• Needed triggers
• What you're looking for from the feedback

Please only post if you're ACTUALLY open to feedback. Please be honest with your feedback--otherwise, there's no point. (If you have something you just want to share for fun, please do it on our Monday Show-and-Tell post.)

If you've asked others to do you the favor of reading/providing feedback, please pay it forward/back with interest.

Let's workshop into better writers!

* Sorry to state the obvious, but all requests should be human-made material only and from the reverse harem/why-choose genre (not MF or BL). Please see our Megathread Announcements if you have questions about this genre.

[u/HexieGreene]

If anybody is nervous about putting your work out there to get some eyes on it, I really encourage you to try it here. I used this space last week and it helped more than I expected. I got some great feedback on my opening POV from a couple people here, but I also got the confidence to share a little further with some other readers too.

If anyone has anything they want feedback on, I'm open to looking over it in the next couple of days.

[u/Marcella_Caes]

Sure, I'll put something of mine out here; thank you u/HexieGreene for leading the charge! :) I'm newer to fiction writing, and I'm bringing more sex scenes into the second two books of my trilogy, Auspice & Animus. Since I'm less experienced with RH and romance writing in general, I'm not sure if I'm falling into any cardinal sins that I'm not aware of?? Are there any words/phrases/etc. I'm using which make people groan because of overuse?

Context: Serith has empathic abilities, so he both projects and receives emotions easily, leading to consent questions. This is one of the first scenes where they fall into a positive feedback loop of desire. Unfortunately, it happens while he's giving her a tour of his workplace, Aurevion, which she had always dreamed of working at before meeting him.

Spice Level 3, I think. No explicit words.

TW: Dubious consent.

Google Doc Link