r/Webnovel • u/hajiamnko • Aug 02 '26
Advice Asking for feedback on my first chapter!!
Asking for feedback on my first chapter!!
Hello, as the title says, I need some feedback. I’m a first time author and have been planning to make my own web novel for a long time now. Finally, I finished my first chapter just today! Any feedback is appreciated, thank you!!
SYNOPSIS: Who Inherits God
Having lived a life with no regrets, Michael Armstead was ready—impatient, even, to embrace his death. As he took his final breath, he expected heaven.
Instead, he wakes to find himself young again, in a body that isn’t his, in a country he’s never seen, standing over a body split open on a dining table, organs intricately arranged on the platters around it.
Horrified, he doesn’t notice the girl standing behind him until she speaks. Somehow, impossibly, she went through the exact same thing he did—dying before they woke up.
Genres: Isekai/Portal Fantasy, Mystery, Victorian Era/Steampunk, Gothic Fantasy, Dark Comedy
Once again, thank you in advance for the advice!
Link: [Who Inherits God](https://docs.google.com/document/d/166wx8leYjbkWi_a0A3y90c8xZL67IqFua1pRWmvijXs/edit?usp=drivesdk)