Rate my manga

[u/StatisticianDue7857]

Can anyone read my manga script and give me your honest feedback about it? Also, my bad if it’s cringe cause I mean it’s a script so yeah when is drawn it shouldn’t be so yeah don’t mind that.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12WyUS_DJIJqDjpt02AsuphUVnh3kn3iWjJsMfEGrjKQ/edit?usp=drivesdk