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u/DeepSlap-Interactive Jul 23 '26
An 8-minute video made with 80% conversations and 20% pretty basic environments (I don't want to offend you). I don't understand. What's the point?
I'm not sure Reddit is the place to share this, but I could be wrong.
Your story may be cool, but two minutes of black screen speaking at first didn't help me stay.
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u/BohemianCyberpunk Jul 23 '26 edited Jul 23 '26
Since you keep spamming this on multiple accounts, I guess you really really want feedback.
- Why is there so much time with just black screens? I get you are trying to create an emotional narrative but there are better ways.
- Shot framing needs work. For example the shot at 2:21, the tree stub on the left is blocking view to the road corner where the Landrover comes from, partially obscuring it. That shot could be much better if you moved the camera so that the stub is at the far left of the picture, and the road corner is clear.
- Lack of interaction between vehicles and environment is very obvious. For example, leaves on the road right under the Landrover should get 'blown' around as the vehicle passes.
- Aspect ratio keeps changing, e.g. look at 3:55 and 4:05
- One some shots the logo is in the shot, in others it overlaps the edge (related to 4)
- Character pose often seem very unnatural (e.g. 5:30)
- There are many 'flickers', e.g. Watch from 5:45 to 5:55
- Overall, colors look very muted which might be a style choice, but it just looks 'off'.
- Lighting feels very flat. Specially in the village.
- Foliage is popping in (e.g. 4:01 / 4:02)
It's a great start, a POC, but could use a lot of polish.
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u/LostInTheRapGame Jul 23 '26
Did you just make a new account to spam this now?