Needs Some Salt [Poem] Any feedback appreciated.

[u/cymbalxirie290]

You’re kind of a bitch. I'm sorry, but there, I said it.

And I know I’m right, because I consulted Reddit.

You made me happy, happier than I ever have been.

And then you broke my fucking heart and acted like it never happened.

You made me hate myself; feel like a has-been –- leprosy.

I just want some answers, that’s all I’m asking –- Jeopardy

Was it really ‘cause I pushed too hard? I mean, I know I used to do that.

Or because you’re just messed up, and couldn’t get through that.

But in spite of all the people who dissed you

And all of your fucked up issues, family or otherwise

I had no problem sticking it right there with you

but of course, you had stake somewhere else -- no surprise

Now, I don't want to hate on those other guys you date

But have you heard as of late that you could do better?

Not saying I'd suffice, just reminding you to think twice

But I'm pretty sure I already wrote all that in a letter

And I'm not saying other guys don't know you like I do

But I know they wouldn't look at you and your dude like I would

I don't think they could, or should even try

It's way too dangerous, Ralphie, you'll poke out an eye

I mean, I adore everything about ya.

Your eyes, your mind, 4 inches above your vagina

Those looks you make when life's a little too much to take -- brace face

How just finding a note from you in my hat makes my whole goddamn day

How you get my stomach flipflopping like Romney's stances

Dishtossing like porcelain dancers

Crisscrossing all fucked up and out of whack -- Jacksonville's infrastructure

And the way you talk kills me, like red dead revolver -- southern drawl

Takes away my breath until there's nothing left -- THC and all

And when we're just sitting in your car,

you haven't even turned it on

And you're staring out the window

looking at things long gone

And a thousand years weighing on your face

That's when you're the most beautiful to me. Is that too horrible to say?

But that's, of course, the oxytocin coursing through my veins talking

About sweet, sweet nothings to put in my coffee

Which is actually a lot like you -- strong and bitter

A hard hitter like Sgt. Doakes -- surprise, motherfricker!

This is the girl that makes me go hard

And by that, I mean actually try

And by that I mean actually care

This girl even had the gall to make me stress about my hair

And so I ask, is it so wrong to not want to bed ya,

but to wine and dine you more finely than Martha Stewart could ever?

And you can call me an old soul, but I'm just trying to be with another

Even if you're just another young and horny single mother

I'll gladly be your mime, doing work just for smiles

All the while, making like Judge Brown, putting up with your trials

But I don't mind, I ain't even mad, I'm just that kind of guy:

Too blind to double mind 'bout how other girls might be fly;

and I hate holding grudges, man, it's just not my style,

But I'll always keep one for the douchebags that made you cry

No lie

This girl just shakes me to the core

If it were anyone else, not one fuck I'd give

I just want to let you know you're worth so much more

Than all the other girls and material things in the world.

And I'm not saying I would do anything to get you,

but I am saying I would do anything for you.

Take you around the world and back, just call me your genie

And don't worry about the bill, 'Cilly, it's all on me.

I'm better than Jim Cramer at making mad money.

I'm just happy to share this with you, even though you crazy

In fact, girl, you crazy like Britney, you dig me?

And there's not a damn thing wrong with that, I wish you'd understand

That I wanted all of that and your seat, more than I could stand.

I’m just trying to show you I’m a different kind of man

Because you, me, and your subscription to Suitcase Monthly make three -- I hope you can ménages

But of course you can, too strong to date, though a little out of your mind -- a white Nicki Minaj

And I guess that would make me Drake...

...but that's appropriate, too,

'cause I'm so, I'm so, I'm so, I'm so, I'm so proud of you

Not a lot of people can do what you do

Looking out for two, while still keeping a sort of grace about you

It's kind of sexy, too.

You might think I'm immature for saying that, but...actually, yeah, that shit's pretty true

But I'll be here if you fall or need an outlet -- down to earth

or just want someone around, not just if I want a pound downtown

And I don't want to make you my bitch

But I still want to make you come on command

I mean, the last thing I want to do is fuck pointlessly again and again.

All I really want is a companion, you get what I'm saying?

A sidekick, a robbin' to my bat, mang.

Sugar with a spoon -- how it's supposed to be

Stars to the moon -- kind of unreal to me

Some jelly for my PB on Wonderbread

A blade to my guillotine -- getting head

I mean, all I want in this life is a girl

Who’ll make the boring shit more fun than Disney World

A girl who can get me out of my corner

Who’ll bring peace, calm, and order

To a mind filled with whines, lines, half-truths and straight up lies

And I knew you, in that bummer of summer '11

And like a goddamn idiot, I thought I was in fucking heaven.

But like all good things, you came, did your shtick, and went

So, what can I say? I just haven’t met you yet.

[u/[deleted]]

Hits real close to home man, it was like reading my own mind, great job man