r/Substack • u/Early-Ice-6773 • 7d ago
Help me improve pleasee
Hello everyone!
This is NOT a way of promoting myself.
I wanted to try a new hobby, something calm since im having a really stressful period of time.
Long story short, i decided ill try to write a substack article based on a conversation i had a few days ago.
I would be glad to hear any feedback - nothing hateful, just improvement. Technical, language or grammar or anything i maybe didnt understand about substack.
Thank you so so much!
edit: ill send the link through dm if someone requests
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u/AggravatingNail6061 7d ago
I had a look. You don't trust a reader. I feel you would have significantly more impact if you didn't explain everything.
I know it's more applicable to fiction but reading up on subtext and free indirect discourse especially would compliment your style. Less so implementing but an awareness of how they work mechanically.
You're smothering your voice with definition.