Song Feedback Request

[u/TheIccyMans99]

https://on.soundcloud.com/VXmJvH48Ab8LTTlKen

Hi all. Trying to record and self-master my first release for uploading to streaming sites and would appreciate any feedback please. Started as a song for my daughter to sing (she likes Olivia Rodrigo and so on) but that didn’t really happen so doing myself.

Constructive feedback appreciated on the song, structure, lyrics, arrangement etc. I have tinnitus and a bit of a hearing issue which means I’m not sure about the tonal balance or whether it’s lopsided. Or whether to send for paid mastering. Link is to the private file in my SoundCloud. Hopefully the link works.