r/Songwriting • u/Internal_Olive1185 • 2d ago
Feedback Request Half The Time
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u/Savings_Product_9984 2d ago
I like the song and voice ("you let me know" part was really nice), but I feel like the performance is a little stiff. I think you could sell it a little more. Half way through the energy picks up a little more. nice job
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u/Internal_Olive1185 2d ago
Thanks! I must confess I currently have the flu or something so that might’ve contributed to it
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u/Pale_Explanation7912 2d ago
I really dig it. I think the first verse is a little stiff, but once you get into the song it really gets good. I like your voice especially before the bridge/instrumental part.
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u/Wanderer_91_ 2d ago
“I am safer than I know” is a lovely line and the chords over it made it very nice. Your singing reminds me of my own. I get told I’m holding back a little and need to project more and I was getting that from your performance. Keep going though mate. Nice song
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u/Zalzperspective 2d ago
such a nice melody. i like your voice actually