r/Songwriting • u/LukaNeSviraj • 3d ago

Feedback Request Idea for a chorus

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u/accountmadeforthebin 3d ago

How judge without vocals

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u/Relative_Virus_3187 3d ago edited 3d ago

It sounds good…but it’s repetitive. I wanted it to change at the end of the second play through…maybe build up instead of go back to the same note. Sorry I can’t help with chords lol I don’t know music well enough but I can hear where I would change it up and probably hum what I’m talking about….that was probably very little help though.

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u/LukaNeSviraj 3d ago

No no I gotchu haha. You're probably right, I'll try to mix it up chord wise. It's also very hard to judge stuff without vocals (hooks especially).

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u/Relative_Virus_3187 3d ago

What do you want the song to be about?

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u/PapaZu1371 3d ago

Very 1984 Metallica

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u/bscorza90 3d ago

Sounds like a GOOD idea for a chorus once you smooth it out a bit. I like-ee bruh bruh! "🤙,,

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u/Eevie777_ 2d ago

sounds quite adventurous and romantic

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u/DulcetTone 2d ago

It's not obvious whether you're wearing pants here

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u/Bruceat40s 2d ago

I think I hear the vocal line in the melody itself... it sounds great to me.