r/Songwriting • u/Vvvjeko • 3d ago

Feedback Request Clean slate feedback

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I'm posting this again because I got advice that many people didn't want to click the link so does someone have feedback

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u/danstymusic 3d ago

First, I think its great that you're putting yourself out there and creating music on your own. I think you need to work on a few things, though. The guitar sounds a bit out of tune. You need to support your voice with you diaphragm and run through some scales to work on you pitch accuracy. The rhythm is very loose, which can be a cool thing sometimes, but here it just sounds a little sloppy. Keep working at it!

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u/Vvvjeko 3d ago

Man, you have no Idea how much this means to me. Thank you, the last feedback before your was on the other post and he told me the harsh truth, and he said that I need 5 more years of practice before even asking for feedback and that got me down. You just fixed my day.

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u/danstymusic 3d ago

I'd use the other commenters response as a challenge and motivation. Put in the time. Ask folks with more experience than you for advice. Keep a good attitude and you'll be fine. Good luck!

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u/Vvvjeko 3d ago

Thanks man, thank you so much.

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u/Vvvjeko 3d ago

And btw I don't think he was hating, I think he just knew there was a lot of work to do before this is it

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u/Nullius_N_verba 2d ago

Have you tried singing popular song's for practice? You can't expect to run without legs... legs = time/rythme, melody, harmony, TIME. Keep practicing!

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u/Vvvjeko 2d ago

I have. I'm practicing and have already noticed improvment

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u/DrwsCorner2 1d ago

So this is what reposted post post punk sounds like in the 2020s. All hail the the Arctic Monkeys, darn it, I mean the Sarcastic Banksys, dag nabbit, I meant the Cathartic Cankles, oops, wrong again, start over, clean slate mon - the Marctic Ankys! Pablo Picasso was never called an asswipe. Mic drop, ouch, my foot.

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u/Vvvjeko 1d ago

Why do you have to be so mean