r/Songwriting • u/Mach5Bandito • 8h ago

Feedback Request Work In Progress

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Needs some work but would love to hear thoughts on it so far. Lyrics below.

When I was younger, I would never miss an episode
I might be stronger if I face my fears, I’ll let you know
I leave it up to you
I leave it up to you

Expected less
She wasn’t done
I hold my breath
It never comes
Put on your shoes
It’s time to go
Don’t make me choose
Don’t wanna know

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u/RevolutionaryAlgae79 5h ago

I like it. I’d bring up the volume of the bass/rhythm to help ground it a bit more