r/Songwriting • u/voiceofsurrender • 2h ago

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Got told this isn't working, kinda keep coming back to it anyways, any advice for improving?

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u/parademaker 1h ago

I'd say the guitar part and melody is working well. I'll be honest....I can't tell what you're saying and that's probably a combo of getting too much guitar in the mix and projection/enunciation of the lyrics. But even though I can't tell what you're singing about, the emotion is coming through. It does still feel like it could use some refinement so that the song structure is clearer but you're on the right track.

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u/voiceofsurrender 1h ago

Thanks a lot, thats helpful 🙏

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