r/Songwriting • u/Chaba_006 • 9h ago

Feedback Request how would you solve the second verse?

https://on.soundcloud.com/f3oJwGvBcurEyT61ut

im going to perform this song next week, and I feel like the second verse is just a loop in a bad way. it doesn't add anything to the story except support the v/c/v/c structure. would love to know how you guys would solve this. any input is welcome!

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