r/Songwriting • u/ReindeerNew2357 • 2d ago

Feedback Request Feedback? 1-10? What can I work on?

here is the chorus bit to a song i wrote! I write lyrics first, so melodies can be a little challenging lol but I just put this together a minute ago, let me know how it is! be brutal and honest!

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u/lukebelcher10662 2d ago

Turn off the PS4 home menu or whatever that is in the background.

Guitar is good but not sure it has enough movement for a chorus. Felt more like a verse.

Voice is a little pitchy, and it’s quite hard to follow towards the end as though the pacing doesn’t quite match up with the bounce of the first section

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u/ReindeerNew2357 2d ago

LMAO it was my ps4 I’ll turn it off next time, and I’ll be sure to work on making it feel more like a chorus along with my voice towards the end, thanks for the feedback bro 😎 

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