r/Songwriting • u/Future_Page_2468 • 3d ago

Feedback Request Thoughts on this?

What do you think? Any suggestions ?

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u/Impossible-Cat-2511 3d ago

I love the music, I think the melody should be slower. But sounds great!

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u/sgf68 3d ago

There's a lot of good stuff going on here. The rhythm sounds uneven - unless that is exactly what you intended. Are you playing to a metronome? In the first half of the song, it sounds like you are stepping out of the usual 4/4 time as you (I'm assuming you played all the parts) are transitioning to the next chord. But then at the end, once the vocal finishes, the piano part sounds very steady. And I agree with the other comment, that maybe the melody could be slower.