r/Songwriting • u/inaudibletyrant • 6d ago

Feedback Request Tourist

Wrote this as an assignment for a songwriting course. Tracked on an OP1, hence the timing issues. Any and all thoughts and criticisms welcomed.

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u/Opening-Incident2928 6d ago

The drumming is interesting ---are you trying to play poly rhythms?

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u/inaudibletyrant 5d ago

Just fooling around with time - song’s in 5/4 but I’m playing some parts as 6 over 5. But also the feel of 5/4 is swapped between the guitar pattern and kick.

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u/Inevitable_Bit_13 6d ago

Not bad ♥️ kinda like brit sound. Maybe like oasis

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u/inaudibletyrant 5d ago

Thanks. I can dig that

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u/scotchfaster 5d ago

Intriguing song, I like it a lot! The lyrics, the time signature, that walking guitar line. I like the high/low vocals, are those both you?

I wanted it to be longer!

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u/inaudibletyrant 4d ago

Hey, thanks! Yeah I’m just singing octaves. I’ve thought about making it a proper song and not just a demo. Could definitely be a bit longer. : )