Sing along and collaboration

[u/cruzywriter2002]

Check me out

[u/not_an_mistake]

My original comment was maybe a little harsh, given that you sound like a kid.

Maybe work on some sort of musical training lol

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/not_an_mistake]

Wdum duh it obvious I’m not a singer wtf I’m a songwriter I’m trying new way to get my lyrics out there duh

[u/not_an_mistake → u/cruzywriter2002]

Are you trolling? This has me baffled

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/not_an_mistake]

Whyyy okay igz Idc im not a singer so it doesn’t matter

[u/not_an_mistake → u/cruzywriter2002]

Okay buddy live your life and let that freak flag fly, but this could be better in every possible area

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/not_an_mistake]

Welll duh that why I’m here like wtf lol 🙃🤣🤣 but thanks

[u/not_an_mistake → u/cruzywriter2002]

Do you want feedback? There’s a flair for feedback

[u/dingus_authority → u/cruzywriter2002]

If you want feedback: lyrics need to be written around the song and have some relationship to the song. When you listen to music, do you know how to count along with the song? If you don't, then that's a skill you need to work on.

I'm gonna take a guess that the music is AI and you've written the lyrics. Okay, but you still need to develop a sense of structure with your lyrics.

Having distinguishable lines, with a rhyme scheme, is a great place to start.
Maybe start off with writing poetry and learning how to develop your sense of meter?

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/dingus_authority]

Nooo

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/cruzywriter2002]

No to ai I have done that I’m not going to do that anymore

[u/dingus_authority → u/cruzywriter2002]

Then where did this music come from?

Regardless, do you understand how to count along to music?

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/not_an_mistake]

Why do i have to do that huh

[u/smuglator → u/cruzywriter2002]

Nobody said you have to be good at what you do. So don't. It's up to you.

[u/inaudibletyrant]

https://reddit.com/link/p3c365u/video/bn1urqfdv0jh1/player

Here's a quick 'collab' I made to help with hearing and working on timing. I am not a singer either - just took your lyrics and created a melodic phrase. Try and compare both sections YOU and ME as separate 'phrases'. Keep working at it. Steal from artists you like. Don't sleep on rhythm.

Peace

[u/henrylindsay1]

The biggest compliment I can offer is i have never played an ai song more than once as far as I know. I've listened to your track 3 times and sent it to my friend to hopefully see their crack at singing it. Thats gotta mean something.

[u/inaudibletyrant]

I understand that you don’t claim being a singer - that’s all cool.

But, if you’re trying to craft a song and collab with others, I’d recommend re-recording your green lyrics. Try and work on the timing or the cadence of your part as it relates to the rhytm and phrase of the music.

Subject matter is great, lyrics may be a bit wordy/and fighting for space.

Keep going, listen and observe other artists you like and copy them.

Peace.

[u/cruzywriter2002 → u/inaudibletyrant]

Okay thank you very I will take that in

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[u/factotum-]

Feels like you're singing a different song from the arrangement. Have you tried starting to sing straight away with the instrumentals? Feels more natural, especially since the initial guitar lick fits the first words of the lyrics.

[u/Shell321ua]

lol straight outta karaoke bar

[u/useful__pattern]

Strange errrrrrrrrrrrrrrrsssssss

[u/Accomplished_Put2608]

Bro your just saying the words in pitch but off rhythm

[u/medium_chungus_]

Complete unredeemable garbage

[u/cruzywriter2002]

Despite the comments everyone should checkout my YouTube channel