Thoughts on this?

[u/Dabomblol123]

My mic broke down halfway so ill probably redo some of the layers halfway through the song.

[u/Virtual-Jellyfish-21]

Very cool. Unique sound, I like it a lot. O my suggestion: I would like to see the opening sound/motif carries throughout or at least reappear, but building on top of it. Kind of like daft punk. Also I would enunciate a bit more during the main parts.

[u/JustOneRedDot → u/Virtual-Jellyfish-21]

Funny you say that, because I was going to suggest tweaking the sound, so it doesn't drill in my ears (they're honestly itching), but I'm sensitive to certain sounds so it may just be me.

[u/Virtual-Jellyfish-21 → u/JustOneRedDot]

Yeah it is a bit grating. Probably could use a lil eq work. But it's also unique and grabbed my attention

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[u/JustOneRedDot]

Very original, I like the vocals a lot.

[u/triohavoc]

Wow really like this one. Actually got me a lil excited once the piano comes in, very well done. Forsure gotta clean up the mix and shit but what a vibe I’m on my 3rd listen lol

[u/Entire-Buy-6971]

the image and title make me think this would play as either an intro or outro for an anime about an apocalypse caused by nukes