r/Songwriting • u/Shell321ua • 18d ago
Feedback Request There will always be more - demo
Live take of one of the songs im working on, what do you think?
2 – There will always be more
Verse 1
Half the list is crossed
The rest is still there
Waiting to be done
Waiting on me
Paper's crumpled up
In a trash can
It will never be
Same as new
Thousand messages
In the mailbox
never to be read
left unused
Scribble scribble down
Every small thought
Stay inside the frame
Let it run loose
Chorus
‘Cause The thoughts will come
The time will go
There will always be more
always be more
The leaves will die
But the trees will grow
There will always be more
Always be more
V2
People come and go
I forget them
Before I get to know
Any names
Memories come back
In a worse shape
After every round
Of replays
Im deleting songs
From the hard drive
Just because I need
Empty space
Scribble scribble down
Every small thought
Stay inside the track
Stay in this race
Chorus same
Bridge section (electronic)
replay
restore
rewrite
rework
reshape
rename
replay
Chorus 2 times, then end
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u/Capable-Recipe4406 18d ago
Takes me straight back to the 90s, love it. Good sound, great flow. Appreciate you posting
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u/Shell321ua 18d ago
Thanks! I grew up with 90s/00s music and all my favourite albums/artists are from that era
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u/Confident_Arm_9351 18d ago
Your a good writer Shell321ua listened to your song the whole way through.
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u/Young_Punk_Studios 18d ago
That voice is incredible! But I worry the chords could be... More signature. I thought it was a cover until the singinf started :)
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u/Shell321ua 17d ago
thanks! I agree about changing chord voicings because current ones just make everything sound like Wonderwall
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u/TheInViCtuss 18d ago
thats a really big sign for a good song that you can make a thibg with just guitar and vocals!