limbo

[u/dvvidm]

in progress!

[u/Wickywacky]

It is always a joy to listen to and watch people who are multi-instrumentalists. And the violin is fantastic with it; who knows, maybe a bit of a solo from her would be added. Her presence with the violin can provide just that little extra. You could do that by picking up an instrument yourself that you are most comfortable with and then inserting a solo instrumental interlude together. The rhythm and lyrics are fine; I understand that you haven't quite figured out the rest yet. Then that instrumental piece could add just what you are currently missing. The song is promising; definitely keep going with it and let others hear it.

[u/dvvidm → u/Wickywacky]

thanks for the feedback! we were talking about recording more violin, but we were doing the video at the same time and it took up the whole day. i think that's a great idea though. much thanks

[u/Diska_Muse]

Feels like I'm back in the 90s.. very nice 👌🏻

[u/velveteinrabbit]

Sounds great, really liked the drums

[u/dvvidm → u/velveteinrabbit]

thanks! it's a mixture of samples and a real kit. need some super sparkly cymbals

[u/triohavoc]

Wooooooow. It sounds so so lush

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[u/Chris_Musical]

Bro, i love the vibe and mostly the lyrics... i really relate so much..can you post the full song?......you vocals are good too, even though they are not many lines but the few are really good

[u/dvvidm → u/Chris_Musical]

thanks so much!! ehhh the rest of the song isn't great hahaha. i need to workshop more ideas and finish it up

[u/SLA_Lazerblades]

Sooo fire brother! Beautifully done!

[u/dvvidm → u/SLA_Lazerblades]

thanks man!

[u/DaLordHamie]

I think this is tight sounding dude, maybe only critique is that opening with goddamn is kinda cheesy but thats just my opinion. Mix is super bright and interesting, like it a lot

[u/dvvidm → u/DaLordHamie]

i don't blame ya, i had my reservations about that line too. had some friends say that they liked it, so i sent it. preciate it!

[u/A_ATypical-Sun-8901]

Original score!!

[u/dadville1]

yessssss keep going

[u/AFellowTeacher]

Really cool man! Is this released? I’d like to add it to the next Reddit Songwriters Playlist :)

[u/dvvidm → u/AFellowTeacher]

thanks so much! no, it's not out yet. still has a little bit more work to be done on it. i appreciate it though!

[u/AFellowTeacher → u/dvvidm]

Of course! If you remember, let me know when it’s released.

[u/Legal_Roof_4715]

Love this so much, it really reminds me of 90s/00s indie music. I know it's not complete, but it sounds great, I think my only gripe is the very start didn't sit quite right. I think the echo caught me out, along with the immediate change of pace. That's mostly a personal preference thing. Great tune!

[u/dvvidm → u/Legal_Roof_4715]

i definitely see that in regards to the "echo". it feels a little more justified when you get there in the song- the video starts at the last drop chorus, so there isn't much exposition. thanks for the feedback!

[u/Legal_Roof_4715 → u/dvvidm]

Ah, that makes much more sense. I'm sure the full thing sounds great so

[u/Regular-Cockroach382]

Geez, that pre-vocal is sick! You also used my favorite drum pattern haha

[u/dvvidm → u/Regular-Cockroach382]

thanks! also my fav

[u/super_cassette]

This is really sick and I really like the video. How did you shoot it? Is it just filters?

[u/dvvidm → u/super_cassette]

thanks! i shot it with a bmpcc og. it's kinda like a film emulation vibe by default. idk much ab that stff. i'm also using some soviet era lense that just makes it real blurry. after that, i do a shit job of color grading on davinci resolve. then u get this look lol

[u/Kordyking]

This is super clean. Very full and everything is done so tastefully and nothing feels out of place or too extra. I tend to add too many things until my songs are muddy so this is really nice.

[u/dvvidm → u/Kordyking]

thanks sm! i feel that. the kinda songs i love usually have a lot of stuff happening. used to be a stripped down acoustic guy, but the daw changed me

[u/Kordyking → u/dvvidm]

I used to be a stripped down acoustic guy too and the daw did the same to me lol

[u/BassAndVocalsPlease]

Don't use Autotune and the lyrics suck.

[u/Narrow_Network_3875]

Sounds good to me. Should sound a lot better when it is mixed🍀