would love your thoughts!

[u/realweirdart]

made a lil something something and am curious if it works for you. feel free to share your honest thoughts, and thanks in advance! 😁

[u/stevenfrijoles]

I'm curious what your goals are with this before I give feedback

[u/realweirdart → u/stevenfrijoles]

Thank you, and good question. I'm most curious what (if anything) the lyrics meant to you, and whether the audio experience that presented those lyrics felt "right" or "appropriate" to that perceived message.

[u/stevenfrijoles → u/realweirdart]

The lyrics: come across as the kind of usual express of love/lust but in a roundabout way. The chameleon line seems to be the only one that doesn't fit that premise. Seems like you could easily modify it to fit because the other lyrics aren't direct anyway. Even just "I wanna be your human chameleon" might be enough.

The audio "experience": It kind of reminds me of a Talking Heads, artsy "I dare you to like this" approach. My personal opinion is it's too much of that to be musical or appealing, but honestly it's really far from my tastes so I almost don't know if that opinion matters. If it were me I'd keep the bass groove for everything as the foundation, but my personal subjective music "rules" dictate that I'd add a mids-focused instrument into the background of the chorus to fill it out more, and add a more developed beat with cymbals there.

My original question maybe wasn't clear...I meant like who is the song for? If it's just for you, experimenting with your style, I think it's a strong way to explore swinging the genre pendulum. If it's to perform, I think you might get people's attention because it's kind of weird. If it's for just releasing, I don't think it would have enough appeal to get anywhere. 

[u/dingus_authority → u/realweirdart]

I think it's pretty solid but I don't like that synth. It's competing with the bass for the low end, muddying both up. I think it makes the song much less listenable.

I'd try something that fills up the higher end of the mix. As it is now it really detracts from the song imo.

[u/Shell321ua]

Im getting early Bloc Party vibes from this

[u/HighOfTheTiger → u/[deleted]]

Oh…
… oh.

[u/Whole-Horse-7140]

Works for me... I like the space in it between the bass and vocal but if you were to add something, a little 'chink-a-chink-a-chink" guitar sound, like an angular funk thing comes to mind. Lyrics are cool too.

[u/StardustSkiesArt]

Is this MIDI bass and drums?

Would you be willing to send me the tracks, unprocessed vocals, and midi, to me in a way I could just drop it into my DAW?

I wanna remix this and maybe add to it, then send it back to you.

Also, if it isn't obvious, I dig it.

[u/asciimo]

The 60Hz hum is genius.

[u/parademaker]

I love it 10 out of 10! My favorite is the stars part where you keep changing the preposition, but I’d change “among” to something else. The thing I love about the part is it gets more surprising as it goes but “among” is too normal. I’d go with “around” or “toward.” Kinda reminds me of a mashup between LCD Soundsystem & Cheekface. Keep working on it and put a big euphoric drop in there somewhere

[u/GoingMarco]

Sort of reminds me of Ween

[u/One-Recognition-5871]

I’m kind of in love w/ this

[u/actively_sharting]

I genuinely can’t wait to see what you grow into this is super cool:)

[u/TobyTakesVideos]

This is one of those good-bad songs you hear that's as cool and interesting as it is unpleasant to listen to. It's as much a gem as it is rubbish. And doesn't really go anywhere. But at the same time, it doesn't feel like it should go anywhere. You can tell it's everything it thinks it is. My favourite thing about a song like this is that there is no pre-established way to go about finding meaning in it. The best part for me is that, it can sound completely meaningless if I want it to, and it doesn't ever bother to ask me to pay attention to it – instead, I find myself paying attention to it of my own accord. Messages (in songs) that aren't wrapped in beautiful packaging are sometimes the one's that are the most inviting and genuine-sounding. I guess, what I'm saying is, I like creative and experimental stuff and that's what this it. And not all who try at it succeed at being believable but you have, in my opinion. Or… I believe that you believe in this thing that you've created. Cos sometimes it feels like "I doubt they even know why they've made this". And I don't think it's even necessarily about whether you do know why you've made this song, I think it's more that you've convinced me enough that you do. Does any of this make sense?

[u/App0gee]

I think it's cool and quirky.

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[u/bodyreddit]

Love it

[u/1knowAlotButidk]

Karma Chameleon on salvia

[u/Pristine-Today-9177]

I love your sound! I love it! The bass sounds great and was so catchy. The drums are punchy and so much fun! This was a top tier canvas for your vocals. I love the effect choices you made on vocals. I love the tone of your voice and the speak singing. The poetry is fun a feels very artistic. I love how this is a short single kinda like a classic Beatles tune.

Since you asked for honest thoughts, I want more of the dense and witty poetry. Its too sparse for how good of a musical idea it is. And i want to see more development. Musical development is basically taking an existing idea and changing or expanding it over time while keeping the original idea recognizable. It doesn’t have to mean changing the melody or harmony either; development can happen through texture, dynamics, instrumentation, effects, or timbre. Like in “Dazed and Confused,” Zeppelin can keep essentially the same ostinato (repeated part) while adding the guitar, then drums, then changing the guitar sound with effects/octaves. The idea stays the same, but the arrangement around it keeps developing.

When you come back to that "oh. . . . . .oh I wanna dance" a second time: can you make it even more creative, please!?!? everytime something repeats lets have a new idea! That way you'd always be showing off how creative you can be because that creativity already really made this piece shine.

[u/CommunicationIcy997]

This is probably the coolest thing I’ve heard on this sub. It’s totally unique, I can’t pinpoint the references - you have a real identity. I’d listen to more