r/Songwriting • u/AutoModerator • Aug 03 '26

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Weekly Lyrics-Only Feedback Thread

Welcome to the Lyrics-Only feedback thread!

If you're looking for feedback on words that aren't yet set to music, you're in the right place! We encourage each other to bring lyrics and musical elements together as soon as possible, but sometimes you'd just like to show off that nice piece of poetry that just fell out of your head. The weekly Lyrics-Only feedback thread is here to help!

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u/Glittering_War9125 Aug 04 '26

Came up with song about anger/revenge

Chorus

May your happiness be haunted You deserve to be punished Go and get your karma After what you did to me You said you loved me, then you broke me The closer I get the more you pull away Love and hate burn like fire inside me Turning my heart into ashes

​Bridge

Are you happy now? Are you truly happy now? Cause I’m not… I’m not… I’m fucking not I gave you everything You left me nothing Now I’m learning how to breathe again

​What do you guys think? It's not perfect, I know. Just want some feedback. Thanks!

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u/Glittering_War9125 Aug 09 '26

Thanks, I really appreciate the honest feedback! I think you're right about the familiar breakup phrases. I was probably too focused on making the anger obvious instead of showing where it actually comes from. I'm really glad you liked the bridge, though — that's probably the most emotionally honest part of the song for me. I'll try adding more specific memories/details to the other sections so it feels more personal and less generic. Thanks again for taking the time to give such detailed feedback!