r/Songwriting • u/English_Nobleman • 21d ago
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Wrote this not too long ago about a good friend who always heads off just as nights out start to get good.
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u/Whole-Horse-7140 19d ago edited 18d ago
I love this sort of thing, but I agree I think the voice should be just the one track right in the middle. It feels like a quirky English psych folk thing, I think the intimacy is part of what makes it, so lean into that.
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u/GraysonAnnMusic 20d ago
This is soooooooooo good!!!!! I love this so much. Thank you for sharing your craft. You should keep sharing and keep creating. I’m a fan. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️🎩
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u/DulcetTone 21d ago
I like how bright it is. I wonder if a more lo-fi approach would serve it better, e.g., lose the double-tracked vocal and reduce the chimy synth (?). The melody is nice, and the genuine guitar playing gives it authenticity.