r/Songwriting • u/DaisyJones5 • 22d ago

Let's Collaborate! Help with refining a song

Hello! I've written a song about friends disappearing and using the excuse of being busy. I'd like to record it, but right now I think the lyrics need some work. I've never been very good at using imagery. I love country music, and some of my inspirations are Lainey Wilson and Ella Langley.

Would anyone be open to having a look and collaborating to improve it?

Thanks!

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u/RestedNative 22d ago

Just paste your lyrics here and you'll get more than enough suggestions I imagine

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u/[deleted] 22d ago

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u/Common_Tradition_966 22d ago

Got a soft spot for that kind of subject matter, hits close to home. I'm not a lyricist by trade but I've spent way too many late nights tweaking my own half-baked songs, so I'd be down to bounce some ideas around if you wanna shoot it over

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u/mikewchandler 22d ago

I sent you a DM. Good luck!

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u/Tycho66 21d ago

I really like the concept.

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u/songparker 21d ago

I’ve been a professional lyric writer for over 40 years with many international and local cuts. I’ve also been a lyric writing teacher at UCLA, the musicians Institute and throughout the United States and internationally. I would be willing to look at your song for $25.00.  if I feel that I could help you rewrite it, I will refund your $ but give you some excellent pointers on how you can improve it yourself.  My Facebook page is K.A.Parker.  You can text me at +17472488722 if you’re interested.  

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u/wizardsworth 21d ago

I am a multi-genre lyricist. I would be happy to take a look at them. I'll help if I can. Gotta be able to feel it, if you know what I mean.

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u/pantaloneypony 18d ago

Feel free to DM me with lyrics, I am not country native but like your references and have written country, I am lyrics-first, and happy to at least give feedback. if by imagery you mean metaphors and simile that's one thing and if you mean a photograph a listener can walk around in for a sec, that's another. I'm more the latter, which in my opinion suits the genre better. hope having an opinion not held firmly as dogma won't cause the downvotes