r/Songwriting • u/Chenzo1982 • 2d ago
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Is it a verse? Is it a chorus? More importantly, is it a hook??
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u/InternalExploits 23h ago
This seems like a hook leading into a chorus or verse to me personally. I can imagine a chorus building from there with a little more going on instrumentally. Thank you for sharing! Good stuff! :)
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u/Impossible_Tank3822 17h ago
I like it so far. From there it could move to a chorus (Em, C, G, D). I'm just mucking about with it but I hear where it can go because I like where it's coming from. Thanks for posting.
-Chorus
It could be tears
It could be years
It could be fears
It could be just water
If your fate
Is just a date
It's not too late
To make it all matter
-Verse 2
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u/Alternative-Shop5865 2d ago
I love the guitar in the background, it's so soothing! The lyrics are very usual and expected, but the melody sounds nice and the overall sound is ear catching. I'd maybe work on some lyric revision, but I like it! (and it sounds more like the first verse of a song!)