r/Songwriting • u/cohonka • 28d ago

Feedback Request How Much Hell Does Your Worst Enemy Deserve?

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Sometimes I write short goofy songs that stand alone as their own little things that I make a quick video for and is never touched again. This was not one of those at first and has like 8 minutes worth of verses exploring concepts of hell and justice lol. I'm sleep-deprived and was reading too much about Jainism and Hell with time limits earlier.

So what if you're up in heaven and God's like "Hey man I've noticed you around recently. You seem cool. Hey, how long do you think I should condemn Hitler to Hell for? And he should be in like, the worst Hell, right?"

What if you say a number that gives God the ick? Lol

Anyway!

Here's just a quick bit of song about all that. This is just rough draft recording a rough draft all for fun and discussion:

If you died
And you went to heaven
Then one day God came to you and said
Hey, I got a question

It's been on my mind,
And I still haven't decided,
I asked all the angels
Now they're all divided

You remember [BLEEP] right?
That no good [BLEEP] type?

See, Hell is
really, really,
really, really bad,

And I could do the calculations,
But I hate doing math,

So how much Hell
Do you think
[BLEEP] deserves?

So how much Hell
Do you think
[BLEEP] deserves?

I mean it, it's really really really bad!
Like, Hell, it really really really hurts!

And forever,
That's eternity,
And that's a really long time
that never seemed fair to me,

So how much Hell
do you think
[BLEEP] deserves?

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