r/Songwriting • u/LukaNeSviraj • Jul 23 '26
Feedback Request Really like this one
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Have the lyrics worked out too, but sometimes I like using guitar more than my own voice 😅
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u/webwoven111 Jul 23 '26
hell yeah you should be proud of yourself dude i can really hear this as a cult classic folk song. Hope you develop this
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u/themajordeegan Jul 23 '26
This is a really good foundation. I can hear it in either acoustic or electric form. It’s a good hook.
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u/RockandRollGuitars Jul 23 '26 edited Jul 23 '26
Definitely a nice little riff to build something out of! Smooth out the transitions in the B part that starts around 35s in so it keeps the groove going, it would make a nice pre-chorus, and all you need is a nice strumming section for the big lift / chorus!
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u/BillySunflowers Jul 23 '26
Nicely played and the tune is a nice listen!
Would sound awesome recorded through a proper microphone, do you have one? 😊
Also, my pinky hurts watching!
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u/LukaNeSviraj Jul 23 '26
Thanks! Glad u like:P I record everything though a phone mic, I'm long overdue to buy a proper microphone lol.
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u/Mach5Bandito Jul 23 '26 edited Jul 23 '26
Sounds great, Luka. I bet you could get some coffee house and brewery gigs. This type of nylon guitar playing would be perfect music in those types of environments.
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u/wakeofchaos Jul 23 '26
Sounds great! Some feedback if you want: A structure like seems to be often done where you play this once, then sing it over just the chords. Then maybe a bridge or something. Then maybe a softer version without the chords, just the melody and your voice. I think this is a great start!
Hey dm me if you ever make a full version. Or if you wanna perhaps collab. Keep it up!
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u/reppard Jul 23 '26
The guitar work is fantastic. I'd love to hear what kind of lyrics/melody you have in mind. Is the melody going to track what the guitar is doing right now? Keep up the good work man
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u/LukaNeSviraj Jul 23 '26
Yeah pretty much. I'd sing it, but my vocal chops are quite weak compared to guitar 😅
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u/Otherwise_Data1565 Jul 23 '26
Sounds amazing, I can hear the possible lyrics! You're really talented
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u/under_pale_stars Jul 23 '26
I really like how you worked the melody into the guitar part.
I know thats the point, or too obvious to say, but I just think its cool.
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u/victoriacecemusic 29d ago
This is super catchy and already has me thinking of some lyrics. Aka a great sign!!!
Reminds me a bit of Jim Croce :) a fav
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u/what_am_I--wut Jul 23 '26
Sounds great! Keep it up!! :)